Новая 'игра'?

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Про выбор full infinitive или bare infinitive после help. Исходный фрагмент был "...help pupils not judge...".
Или речь о том, что not перед bare infinitive не может стоять? Или я вообще не понимат.

Понятно, мы с вами просто не поняли друг друга

Я никогда не встречала негативный help без to. Надо бы поисследовать...

Дело в том, что help может быть и с to, и без to, но вот негативный....

[Maimiti_Isabella]

definitely help somebody not to do something!

[Тина]

Вы так старались использовать все слова, что слегка перестарались

essential judgement, make their child elitist - бррр

а многих слов я вообще не нашла - вам они не понравились?

boring (inf) --> tedious / uninspiring

art directions --???

appeal to private teachers - what do you mean by that?

turn vs. turn out

give them some presents for progress --> give them some presents to encourage them / to reward them

etc

Во-первых спасибо огромное за feedback!

Во-вторых
согласна что перестаралась)) и накрутила)
Пропущенные слова понравились, просто пропустила их..
art directions имела ввиду направление искусства... короче опять перемудрила..
appeal to private teachers - неправильно поняла значение слова... имела ввиду обратиться к частным учителям... не в том смысле поняла перевод этого слова как обращение...
Спасибо большое еще раз за исправления и за новые, более интересные слова!

В третьих.. переписала я свое сочинение. Получилось вот что:

It is obvious, that only pupils with their parents should judge about the necessity of taking art lessons, because they can be tedious for majority of them. When parents see that art has captured their child's interest, they make the crucial decision to let them go to art school. Wealthier parents choose elitist art courses, which are immensely popular nowadays. Usually, the idea of attending art lessons appeals to youth greatly and they study there with pleasure. Unfortunately, sometimes, after several lessons, it turns out that child has no aptitude for art. Parents seek to give kid some presents to encourage them, but they become disheartened and refuse visiting the art school or courses, which have no relevance for them anymore.

[shirly]

Nowadays, being a specialist in arts or even knowing more that the average person knows about arts considers as an elitist characteristic. One of the approaches to fill this gap is to teach arts in school. Because of all the doubts I have concerning this question I appeal to add a new discipline in school programs, but don't make it an essential one.
Those schoolchildren who have an aptitude for artistry can join the classes. Having talent and relevant education can help them to express themselves. Exercising schoolmate's talent will encourage to visit arts classes those who was not sure rather they want to learn about arts or not. And there is a high probability that new discipline will capture some of these children's interest. At the same time, the optionality of classes will provide children, who have no aptness for the arts, not to become dishearted by misjudgment.

[Maimiti_Isabella]

It is obvious, that only pupils with their parents should judge about the necessity of taking art lessons, because they can be tedious for majority of them. When parents see that art has captured their child's interest, they make the crucial decision to let them go to art school. Wealthier parents choose elitist art courses, which are immensely popular nowadays. Usually, the idea of attending art lessons appeals to youth greatly and they study there with pleasure. Unfortunately, sometimes, after several lessons, it turns out that child has no aptitude for art. Parents seek to give kid some presents to encourage them, but they become disheartened and refuse visiting the art school or courses, which have no relevance for them anymore.

выделенное красным непонятно
запятая не нужна

Я, как вы понимаете, все ошибки обсуждать здесь не буду. Этим вы должны заниматься с вашим tutor (надеюсь, что он/а у вас есть)

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Nowadays, being a specialist in arts or even knowing more that the average person knows about arts considers as an elitist characteristic. One of the approaches to fill this gap is to teach arts in school. Because of all the doubts I have concerning this question I appeal to add a new discipline in school programs, but don't make it an essential one.
Those schoolchildren who have an aptitude for artistry can join the classes. Having talent and relevant education can help them to express themselves. Exercising schoolmate's talent will encourage to visit arts classes those who was not sure rather they want to learn about arts or not. And there is a high probability that new discipline will capture some of these children's interest. At the same time, the optionality of classes will provide children, who have no aptness for the arts, not to become dishearted by misjudgment.

Простите, но тут мало что имеет смысл.

a specialist in arts - что это такое?
I appeal to add a new discipline - что это значит?
but don't make it an essential one. - похоже, что вы обращаетесь ко мне?
have an aptitude for artistry - что это такое? artistry это ближе по значению к 'артистичность'.
Exercising schoolmate's talent - т.е. один ребенок должен еxercisе talent своего / своей schoolmate?

etc

В общем, вам надо писать пока проще. Не пытайтесь создавать 'умные' предложния: это еще впереди. Главное для вас, я так понимаю, правильно выразить мысль использую простые предложения.

[Тина]

выделенное красным непонятно
запятая не нужна

Я, как вы понимаете, все ошибки обсуждать здесь не буду. Этим вы должны заниматься с вашим tutor (надеюсь, что он/а у вас есть)

Конечно!
Спасибо огромное за то что вы делаете! Это уже много!

[shirly]

Простите, но тут мало что имеет смысл.

a specialist in arts - что это такое?
I appeal to add a new discipline - что это значит?
but don't make it an essential one. - похоже, что вы обращаетесь ко мне?
have an aptitude for artistry - что это такое? artistry это ближе по значению к 'артистичность'.
Exercising schoolmate's talent - т.е. один ребенок должен еxercisе talent своего / своей schoolmate?

etc

В общем, вам надо писать пока проще. Не пытайтесь создавать 'умные' предложния: это еще впереди. Главное для вас, я так понимаю, правильно выразить мысль использую простые предложения.

Спасибо большое!!! Мне на 'умные' предложения преподаватель тоже внимание обратил. Буду пока учиться просто излагать свои мысли)

[NortT]

There are some crucial reasons why youngsters should study arts even if it does not appeal to them.
Firstly, kids who are taught arts have better imagination than those who do not deal with arts. However, in order to encourage children to study arts, teachers should capture their interest. Moreover, teachers should not judge their learners strictly. In other case, young learners, especially ones who do not have aptitude for arts or relevant skills, might become disheartened about arts.
Secondly, pupils who study arts can understand the meaning of elitist pieces of arts. Why is it important? I don’t know. Actually, I don’t know how to use this word in such a context

[Maimiti_Isabella]

There are some crucial reasons why youngsters should study arts even if it does not appeal to them.
Firstly, kids who are taught arts have better imagination than those who do not deal with arts. However, in order to encourage children to study arts, teachers should capture their interest. Moreover, teachers should not judge their learners strictly. In other case, young learners, especially ones who do not have aptitude for arts or relevant skills, might become disheartened about arts.
Secondly, pupils who study arts can understand the meaning of elitist pieces of arts. Why is it important? I don’t know. Actually, I don’t know how to use this word in such a context

Good!

kids - informal
judge their learners --> the learners (the idea is not developed anyway - why shouldn't they do this?)
have no aptitude for arts (sounds better as it's more formal)

unnecessary repetition of words/ideas:

• Firstly, kids who are taught arts have better imagination than those who do not deal with arts. --> Firstly, kids who are taught arts have better imagination than those who are not.
  
• In other case, young learners, especially ones who do not have aptitude for arts or relevant skills, might become disheartened about arts --> In other case, young learners, especially the ones who do not have an aptitude for arts or relevant skills, might become disheartened.

[Jason Bourne]

Nowadays children often face the necessity of learning arts which results in somewhat becoming disheartened by the teaching process. I completely agree with the judgement that arts should be part of the school program.

The main reason why learning arts can prove useful is that knowledge in this field is relevant to general education. Encouraging one’s child to learn arts increases his overall level of culture. Even if he has no aptitude for this part of study, it is absolutely vital to motivate him by any means possible.

Moreover by learning arts the child can find his interest captured by some particular aspect, which appeals personally to him.

To make it short I believe that teaching arts is unexpendable part of teaching process to help your child to become a member of elitist society.

[Maimiti_Isabella]

Nowadays children often face the necessity of learning arts which results in somewhat becoming disheartened by the teaching process. I completely agree with the judgement that arts should be part of the school program.

The main reason why learning arts can prove useful is that knowledge in this field is relevant to general education. Encouraging one’s child to learn arts increases his overall level of culture. Even if he has no aptitude for this part of study, it is absolutely vital to motivate him by any means possible.

Moreover by learning arts the child can find his interest captured by some particular aspect, which appeals personally to him.

To make it short I believe that teaching arts is unexpendable part of teaching process to help your child to become a member of elitist society.

Вам не кажется, что первое и второе предложения противоречат друг другу?

Они становятся disheartened by the teaching или by learning process/

Совершенно непонятная для меня разбивка на абзацы.

Слишком много informal pronouns. И вообще я не поняла почему вы так беспокоитесь о моем ребенке


member of elitist society. - это все хорошо или плохо, быть member of elitist society?

that knowledge in this field is relevant to general education - не поняла...

for this part of study - не поняла...

И почему вы так настаиваете, что все дети должны быть мужского пола ('he')?

[Jason Bourne]

that knowledge in this field is relevant to general education - не поняла...

I meant "education in general"

for this part of study - не поняла...

arts is a part of study

Да уж, не всегда получается перестроить мозг на английский лад, особенно прикольно получилось с child. Прям какое-то гендерное неравенство

Спасибо за ценные замечания

[Ветерок]

И почему вы так настаиваете, что все дети должны быть мужского пола ('he')?

Подскажите пожалуйста а как выкручиваться в таких ситуациях с полом ? Я понимаю что ребенок он и мужского пола и женского может быть, как тогда правильнее написать то ? a child бла бла бла может улучшить his/her физическое состояние. Через slash что ли?

[Jason Bourne]

Подскажите пожалуйста а как выкручиваться в таких ситуациях с полом ? Я понимаю что ребенок он и мужского пола и женского может быть, как тогда правильнее написать то ? a child бла бла бла может улучшить his/her физическое состояние. Через slash что ли?

Если пол ребенка не известен, то употребляется нейтральное it