My essay, проверьте, покритикуйте! Спасибо!

[Maimiti_Isabella]

казахстанское, наверное, будет более правильно

спасибо

беле того преподаватели местные и сами только со студенческой скамьи в основном казахстанское, наверное, будет более правильно

А как же?

с тобой native занимается сексом)

[smandler]

порой мне кажется, что у нас native это человек из другой страны, который считает, что английский язык для него родной при этом совсем не обязательно наличие умения преподавать имеется горький опыт, когда так называемый native дает знаний меньше, чем интернет. По мне так лучше наш преподаватель с опытом и знанием формата экзамена.

[smandler]

иногда занятия с nativу преподавателем действительно похожи на занятия сексом причем насильственным

[Maimiti_Isabella]

иногда занятия с nativу преподавателем действительно похожи на занятия сексом причем насильственным

Если в результате 'выплескивается' ребенок в виде требуемого результата IELTS, то наверное они стоят того?

Хотя rape, он и в Казахстане, rape

[smandler]

если и выплескивается то новорожденный %) на мой вопрос а все 8 можете, мне сказали а это возможно?

[Maimiti_Isabella]

на мой вопрос а все 8 можете, мне сказали а это возможно?

То есть?

[SunRise]

Вот и мне, похоже, такой rape нужен. Без него, видимо, никак. Хотя.... writing получился лучше всего. А спикинг - хуже всего.

[smandler]

То есть?

бал гарантируют, но похоже не выше 6,5 (кстати overall)

[lenick]

здравствуйте, оцените, пожалуйста, моё сочинение. всем заранее огромное спасибо


Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Although the idea that the growth of the petrol price could work out traffic congestion and contamination problems is the case for somebody, in my opinion, it would not have an appropriate effect. There is a row of other measures which could turn out to be more effective.

Despite the price of petrol the problems of traffic jams and air pollution will remain the same. A person who got used to using a private car will hardly alter it to public means of transport. For an ordinary citizen personal comfort is of higher value than a city scale problem of traffic. Apart from this not only using but also manufacturing a car is extremely harmful for the environment. Producing and utilizing engines, tyres and others vehicle components are processes more injurious for the environment than carbon dioxide and monoxide provided by cars. So, increasing the petrol price will not solve traffic and pollution questions at all.

Several other steps could be taken to improve the issue in dispute. Firstly, restriction for private cars usage in the city center could be provided like it was implemented in London, New York and Venice with the greatest impact for decreasing of traffic congestion. Secondly, using of alternative sources of energy might be helpful to make the environment cleaner. A lot of households are using wind, solar and water energy and such experience might prove very useful for transportation too. For instance, there is a taxi company in Japan which uses electric cars only and it is extremely successful not only because of its environmental cleanliness but also of its low prices.

To sum up, the price of petrol does not have any impact on solving the problem of traffic jams and pollution. Other steps should be taken to improve the current situation.

[orionix]

здравствуйте, оцените, пожалуйста, моё сочинение. всем заранее огромное спасибо ...

Я вот вообще не эксперт кого либо здесь оценивать, просто поделюсь своим мнением - классно, очень классно. Мне понравилось, четко и лаконично..

[orionix]

Всем доброго дня.
Буду признателен за разбор моего эссе.

Спасибо всем большое заранее!


In some countries, people are forced to retire when they reach a certain age.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.



There is a social stage called retirement. It is supposed that people in vast majority of countries, reaching a particular age, should leave their jobs and start to get pension. At a first glance nothing is wrong with that event; however plunging deeply into that issue reveals not only benefits, but also some drawbacks. I am going to shed the light on some of those pros and cons.

Firstly, usually the moment one gets his pension age he may suffer from some chronic illnesses or have various ailments, or, it can sound more polite, chances to lose health only increase with aging. Care for own mental and physical state becomes the most crucial concern. Apparently, retired people may spend more time having a rest, and lead much more tranquil life. Some of them may satisfy themselves by taking variety of hobbies or by participating in diverse clubs of interest. Other prefers to share their time with friends and relatives. Other words old individuals get one more opportunity to acquire long-expected freedom.

Nonetheless, completely different point of view exists. Significant part of society believes that many people of the pre-pension age haven’t exhausted their energy capacities. Those folks are more valuable than young professionals, because, and it is obvious, they are more experienced in certain things. Along with issue mentioned above, there is an also considerable challenge of money shortage. It is an explicit social question that retired people can not afford a lot of common things, since the pension they are paid is low enough.

To sum up briefly, retirement issue is quite contradictory; several number for and against are there.


около 270 слов..., писалось правда долго.... около часа (((

[Maimiti_Isabella]

бал гарантируют, но похоже не выше 6,5 (кстати overall)

6.5 overall - это вполне достижимо 'по гарантии'

[Maimiti_Isabella]

здравствуйте, оцените, пожалуйста, моё сочинение. всем заранее огромное спасибо


Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Although the idea that the growth of the petrol price could work out traffic congestion and contamination problems is the case for somebody, in my opinion, it would not have an appropriate effect. There is a row of other measures which could turn out to be more effective.

Despite the price of petrol (запятая) the problems of traffic jams and air pollution will remain the same. A person who got used to using a private car will hardly alter it to public means of transport. For an ordinary citizen personal comfort is of higher value than a city scale problem of traffic. Apart from this (запятая) not only using but also manufacturing a car is extremely harmful for (usually 'to' in the given context) the environment. Producing and utilizing engines, tyres and others vehicle components are processes more injurious for the environment than carbon dioxide and monoxide provided by cars. So, increasing the petrol price will not solve traffic and pollution questions at all.

Several other steps could be taken to improve the issue in dispute. Firstly, restriction for private cars usage in the city center could be provided like it was implemented in London, New York and Venice with the greatest impact for decreasing of traffic congestion. Secondly, using of alternative sources of energy might be helpful to make the environment cleaner. A lot of households are using wind, solar and water energy and such experience might prove very useful for transportation too. For instance, there is a taxi company in Japan which uses electric cars only and it is extremely successful not only because of its environmental cleanliness but also of its low prices.

To sum up, the price of petrol does not have any impact on solving the problem of traffic jams and pollution. Other steps should be taken to improve the current situation.

моя оценка этого эссе 6.5 - 7, но я совсем не уверена в том, что на экзамене будет такая же. Есть несколько проблем с coherence, с пунктуацией / структурой предложений и один или два случая of the use of rather informal words in the otherwise quite formal writing.

С другой стороны - нет грамматических ошибок, на вопрос эссе ответ дан и с примерами.

Общий вывод на основании одного эссе у меня не получается. Впечатление неоднозначно. Давайте еще одно

Я выделела те слова и предложения где есть проблемы (только первый абзац)

[Vanderley]

Всем доброго дня.
Буду признателен за разбор моего эссе.

Спасибо всем большое заранее!

Привет Щас разберём по полной программе

Во-первых, мне не нравится, что вы с формулировкой делаете. Смотрите, фраза:

In some countries

у вас превращается в:

in vast majority of countries

Смотрите, что дальше происходит. Вот вы перефразируете проблему из задания:

It is supposed that people in vast majority of countries, reaching a particular age, should leave their jobs

а потом зачем-то добавляете

and start to get pension

Вы смещаете фокус с проблемы и показываете, что не можете перефразировать близко к начальному тексту.

Ну и самое главное. Смотрите, проблема в задании формулируется:

people are forced to retire

А вы говорите что плюсом этого является:

Other words old individuals get one more opportunity to acquire long-expected freedom.

Непонятно, так их вынудили уйти или они сами давно хотели? Мне кажется это мимо. Я бы, говоря про плюсы, написал про то, что при помощи такой меры решаются проблемы безработицы среди молодёжи.

Вот.

Ну, и заключение у вас очень слабое. Там кроме retirement ничего нету по теме.

Это про таск ачивмент было. Ща про связность попробую написать.

[mati]

Добрый день.
Не посмотрите мое творение? Заранее спасибо.Тему взял на предидущей странице.

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Today the problems of traffic conjunctions and increasing pollution of atmosphere from car exhausts have become urgent ones in many countries. As a possible solution, some people suggest to inclement prices for fuel. It is disagreed with this standpoint, and in this essay another way to address these problems will be offered.

To begin with, overpricing the petrol leads to deterioration of economical situation in countries and, consequently, can cause the impoverishing of population. It is a common knowledge that even today every customer pays thirty cents in each dollar in the price of such vital products as milk and bread. Moreover, since the number of disadvantaged people is enormous around the world, it is more than likely that this measure can breed serious riots and social explosions in many countries. Hence, it has become clear why many people consider this way to tackle the challenges of traffic conjunctions and pollution as unacceptable.

There is a number of ways to alleviate these issues. One of the most obvious one is the development of public transport. For example, in Tokyo, where the population is more than fifteen millions citizens, the government of Japan solve the problem by building state of the art network of underground railway. Therefore, other ways to solve these problems of big cities can be found.

To sum up, it is evident that the inclination of the price of petrol can increase social tensions, and the governments should find other ways to ease these car-related problems.