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Nowadays people often have a stressful 1 (adj) and fast (adj) rhythm (noun) of life. 9 The relationships with other people such as family, friends and collegues 2, become more valuable. However 3 some people consider that work and wealth take first place in their 4 lifes. 6 Personaly, I think that the 5. question is a controversial one and is open 7 for debate. 8
2. What does this comma separate?
3. However is a signposting word and we must put a comma after it!
4. one wife - two wives, one loaf - two loaves, one leaf - two leaves, one life, two lives (but as everything else in English this is not a 100% rule )
5. Which question? You haven't mentioned any questions as yet! Maybe you mean 'the issue'?
6. Is this a typo or a spelling mistake: personally
7. In this context open TO debate
8. The last sentence is a cliche, which will not earn any brownie points.
9. There needs to be a 'stepping stone' from the first sentence to the second one. I think a cause and effect word would do the trick: Consequently / In this context / As a result (and don't forget that those are signposting words. See 3)
Please, don't feel upset, you're just at the beginning of the IELTS (crossed out) the real English discovery journey, and this might take some time.
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