Сообщение от Goran Dražić
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1. I've thought that "...for instance for sport or music..." in topic is only for example, i.e. for my clarification of topic. But you show that it was not "for instance", but "mandatory".
2. When I've taken this topic (from Mirina) I didn't think that it is too difficult. Only when I'd begun to write I've understand that I have no ideas what to write about. Only one idea was born in my head. My essay was about that idea. I absolutely agree with you that my attempt is not good. Your view is much better -
How can you answer this question? 1. In some/all cases you need a talent. 2. In some/all cases you can be tought. All you have to do now is think of the "cases". In 1. you can write about occupations connected with sports and music that involve a lotvof creativity. For example, a composer or a forward in football. Creativity is something that is prohlematic to teach, so here if you are not talented, you are screwed. In 2. you can write about occupations connected with discipline like a defender in football, with developing some technique like a javelin thrower or with a lot of practice like a musician playing in an orchestra. That's my vision of this essay.
3. My opinion is in the last paragraph. But you are quite right again. It doesn't look like my opinion. Moreover, I combined it with conclusion. In general, as far as I understand, it is not bad idea, but my realization is too weak - neither opinion nor conclusion.
Goran, thanks again for you critical review. It is that really help me (and other candidates also) to understand what to do.
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